Well, I re-read it yesterday evening and knew what was wrong with it, but couldn't see how to fix it. With the wisdom that comes of long experience I knew the answer was to not think about it but wait for my subconscious to find the answer. I therefore watched seven episodes of Seinfeld back to back and went to bed at 1am still waiting for the solution. Woke up, sat down at the laptop and my subconscious came through immediately, but as so often happens - and as I feared - the necessary change means tweaking several other chapters, too. I'm now four and a half hours into that process. (I know this wasn't really your question, but I'd hardly be likely to tell you this is the chapter in which Strike and Robin finally fall into each other's arms, would I? But I will say, it's not that chapter.)
